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   PID: JamNNTPd/Cygwin32 1.3 20190208   
   CHRS: IBMPC 2   
   TZUTC: 0300   
   TID: hpt/w32-mvc 1.9.0-cur 2019-01-08   
   Alexander Koryagin:   
      
   AK> As  I  see  it,  the  original  text  is very strong and   
   AK> succulent.   
      
   Succulent?  What does that mean?   
      
   AK> Probably, you should apply to a bilingual person -- IMHO   
   AK> only he/she can help you in checking your translation.   
      
   I seek help with English.   
      
   AK> Also  you  should  at first tell people about the author   
   AK> and the novel, or at least to tell who  was  that  El...   
   AK> Bianca. A puppy.   
      
   I  know  nothing  about  him  save that he is the son of the   
   great Soviet writer Albert  Likhanov  and  is  considered  a   
   follower of the Turgenev tradition.  As to Bianca, I thought   
   it would only please the  reader  to  realise  her  identity   
   through reading...   
      
   AK> From my experience, I've learned the main rule -- if you   
   AK> want translate from Russian, your English  version  must   
   AK> be  two  times  more  clear  and understandable than the   
   AK> original.   
      
   What  translations  do  you  find  good  according  to  this   
   criterium?   
      
   AK> And  probably  you  should  use  more  common words, for   
   AK> instance instead of "bole" -> "trunk".   
      
   "trunk" is too American and modern.  It does  not  fit  into   
   the pastoral scene.   
      
   AK> I strongly recommend you to learn how to use a spell checker.   
      
   If I do it, I shall unlearn spelling :P   
      
   Your corrections:   
      
   AK> to the cold body of the earth =>   
   AK> to the cooling earth body.   
      
   Why?   
      
   AK> with a lush mandarine blanket =>   
   AK> with a lush orange blanket   
      
   Have  you  read  the original, which indeed has "orange"?  I   
   chaged it to "mandarine" because in English  "orange"  is  a   
   common  color  name,  whereas  Likhanov used the name of the   
   fruit rather than of the color and  I  wanted  to  emphasise   
   that fruit association.   
      
   AK> shaked off =>   
   AK> shook off   
      
   [red face]   
      
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